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Welkom nieuwsbericht:

Beetje overgebruik van het woord cool.to our new website*
Ik vind dat het snel genoeg gaat, ze krijgen doorgaans binnen enkele uren reactie, al dan niet binnen een paar minuten.

Aangepast, minder cool-gebruik, en wat uitleg over 2.0

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Vind de bouw van de zinnen niet geweldig, dus eh, rewrite

To celebrate the release of the new website and the re-launch of Las Venturas Playground we have come up with a contest. This contest, of course, comes with a great prize! You can win a completely free nVidia PNY GTX 260-OC videocard! Everyone, except for the crew, is able to participate.

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So what does one have to do to win this brand new videocard? The answer is simple; just have fun on the services Las Venturas Playground offers. As you can see on the player profiles, we have introduced something new; karma. Every single registered player has their own karmalevel. This level is calculated using a lot of different statistics. These statistics range from the amount of forumposts you have made to the amount of people you killed ingame. The more you are involved in the community, the higher your level.

offers. > offers!
on the player profiles > on player profiles
something new > something new:
the higher your level. > the higher your karmalevel will be.

In order to win the videocard, you will have the the player that earns the most Karma within a month. From which to which date this will be has yet to be determined. Play on Las Venturas Playground, join in on IRC, post on the forums and who knows, you may just be the winner of this contest! And with that, put this completely new videocard in your computer!

you will have the the player > you will have to be the player
which to which date > gewoon een maand vanaf de release

The contest is open to join for every registered player, this includes newly registered players but also people who have been on Las Venturas Playground for years. Everyone has an equal chance of winning.

If you are registered already, there is nothing more you have to do but use our services. If you haven't registered yet, you can do so on our registration page. After a month we will personally contact the winner and announce it on this very website, the forum and other Las Venturas Playground services.

Regards,

The Las Venturas Playground Management

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